Flash: Busboy

He stares down the long hall, his cart empty, sweat beading his upper lip and inside his cap. His knees are weak and his hands shaking did he really sign up for this?

“Open”, he shouts. The gate creaks back.

Arriving at the first door, he flips the lock, “push through your tray”. Grabbing it, he throws it on the cart proceeds to the next door.

Unbelievable, I am a busboy on Death Row.”


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This week’s word is Busboy. The word limit is 75 words. This one comes in at 74.

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  1. Great job, Val. Been a while, but you are still wonderfully amazing. Later.

  2. Adore! All I can say is this is going to be our most twisted book yet!

  3. Excellent. I knew it was a prison at the very beginning of the story, but the bellboy was a real surprise. I love this things! Good job.

  4. Amusing to think there are busboys on death row. What a God-forsaken job that would be. Nice work, Val.

  5. You always capture us in those first few words Val… lovely posting.. 🙂 and thank you for your most welcome visit to what is Gardeners world at the moment!… Have a wonderful weekend xx

  6. Goodness me. I love the ‘twisted ending’. Something not expected but so fitting to the story. I so enjoyed reading this, Valentine. Awesome.

    I don’t like to see anyone’s submissions prior to attempting the Flash so I won’t jump off someone else’s scene unconsciously.

  7. That last line was the clincher – very well done, Val.

  8. That’s a job nobody considers

  9. Not a job I’d sign on for either. LOL

  10. I wasn’t expecting this ending either. You have a great imagination — and great writing.

  11. I like the twists in your stories as I get bored with stories that have predictable endings

  12. wow Val, Really great.

  13. Gets no more basic than that.

  14. Ah!! I love this!!!

  15. Good one. I caught on to the prison, but not the busy boy and death row. 🙂

  16. Hey Val loved it, you guys are so rocking the Flash Fictions 🙂

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