Winter Flash-Irrational

True had a sense of being watched, an itch making her hair stand up as if with a life of its own. She refused to turn around instead, she continued her walk along the river, sauntering as if without a care in the world.  Around the next bend, she knew there was a bench where Jimmy Jon sat each morning to watch the riverboats, she would stop there and watch for who was following.

“Morning JJ.”

“Blessed Day, you got problems a following you.”

“How do you know, JJ?”

“Lookee there at that man, he doesn’t fit the riverwalk folk; not one bit at all.”

True looked where JJ nodded his head and saw the man, tailored suit, cropped hair and pale skin. Nothing about him stood out, but he didn’t fit in either.  She felt irrational in her fear of this stranger, until he smiled.


WinterFlashinthePan

It is a new season, time for a Winter of Disturbing Flashes. Flash in the Pan is brought to you by the remarkable Red of M3 fame, to join in the fun read the rules at the link provided and get to flashing!

The word this week is Irrational with a word limit of 150.  Irrational comes in at 149.

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Comments

  1. I love the name, True. So pure, it says a lot about the character. You’ve set up a nice mystery there. Interesting…

  2. Happy Belated T-Day, Val! Hope it was lovely. Maybe it is the cynic in me, but I think the guy’s smile reveals he is up to no good. I don’t know. . .I’ve had several experiences of a guy following me and discovering that he was as scary as I imagined. Good one!

    • Thank you my friend, hope yours was spectacular as well. Mine ended with my favorite desert, Buttermilk Pie so I am happy. 😉

      I think you are right, he doesn’t belong and he is up to no good. True knew there was a problem and JJ simply confirmed.

  3. Not sure the tension abated much with that smile Valentine! Now i want to know more :-).

  4. That smile can mean both good and evil. She could ignore him and miss an opportunity to whatever good that might lead to – or respond and —– decisions, decisions.

    Okay, stick with JJ – at least he is perceptive.

    Happy Thanksgiving Val,
    Eric

  5. HAPPY THANKSGIVING Valentine.

  6. Sometimes we get a sense of somebody before they even say a word or before they even smile… Oh wait: 🙂

  7. Happy Thanksgiving to you and yours … so some music for the day. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=fYi9Vr8bHJY

  8. Happy Thanksgiving Val my sweet and great friend 🙂 😉

    Andro xxxx

  9. Well there are different kind of smiles, some uplifting and some threatening.

  10. This is quite intense, Valentine.

  11. Gotta love this character, Val! I hope you do do a book!

    In the meantime, I hope you and your family have a fabulous holiday tomorrow, and I hope you weren’t too terribly affected by the weather that came through Dallas this week.

    Hugs from Ecuador,
    Kathy

    • The weather? Oh, you mean that nasty, what the sam hell is that 30 degrees outside thing going on? That weather? No not to terribly affected. 😉

      I am so glad you enjoy True, she is my favorite. Some day Kathy, some day.

      Hugs back from the iceberg that claims to be Dallas
      Val

  12. The hair stood at the back of my neck before True turned around. I didn’t expect the smile to cut the tension. Extraordinary story in a nutshell. 😉
    Happy Thanksgiving, Val. 😀

  13. Sometimes all that is needed is a smile to break the ice. I have enjoyed reading this one Val, but then I always love your FTP stories and postings alike. Have a delightful Thanksgiving my sweet friend 🙂 😉

    Andro xxxx

  14. Val all your Flashes have talent, and this could be the opening of some Novel with some hidden tale…
    Wishing you and yours a Happy Thanksgiving Val… and while I am here, you also have been mentioned on my latest post
    so It gives me great pleasure in giving you The Sister of the World Blogger Award Love and Blessings
    http://suedreamwalker.wordpress.com/2013/11/27/the-sisterhood-of-the-world-blogger-award/
    Love and Blessings Sue xxx

    • I saw this Sue, before I saw your comment here. Thank you my friend, it is such a kind honor.

      I am so happy you enjoy my FTP offerings and that you enjoy True, my favorite character.

  15. You must finish the story, please?

  16. There’s the True lady again creating a mystery.

  17. Shivers)))).
    Love the name “TRUE”
    HAPPY THANKGIVING, dear sweet, Val. XXXxxxxx

    • I do as well, there is a story behind the name. Perhaps some day in the future I will tell it.

      Happy Thanksgiving to you and your dear family as well. Much love to all of you.

      XX

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